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I once yearned for physicality… then you came into my life
I began to learn of things that were so much more important

I used to think life was cruel… then you came into my life
Now I see what beauty the world can truly offer to humble man

I wanted a woman to have on my arm… then you came into my life
Now I see that a partner is someone to explore the world with

I only wanted money and fame… then you came into my life
Now the only thing I covet is something that cannot be bought

I thought possessions gave comfort… then you came into my life
Now I feel myself filled with peace by your mere presence

I believed that I was doomed to misery… then you came into my life
Now I see that, with some work, I can be normal once again
Ok this is the first piece I have tried to write without a rhyming scheme.
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Aeonix90 Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2011   Writer
I can totally relate to this poem in alot of ways. Acheivieing goals, doing what makes you happy, being successful in what makes you happy, having a relationship, and so on and so on are all "things" that cannot be purchased but give a certain type of happiness and fulfillment. "I thought posessions gave comfort...then you came into my life".
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Blueturtle9 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2011   Writer
It's amazing how so many simple things can make your life that much better isn't it?
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artemis01nenefan Featured By Owner May 19, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I write about half rhyme scheme, half without. It depeds on my mood. But that's sweet
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Blueturtle9 Featured By Owner May 19, 2011   Writer
Fair enough and thanks :D
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artemis01nenefan Featured By Owner May 20, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
:huggle: You're welcome.
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CrowIam Featured By Owner May 19, 2011
weird...so unnatural!!
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Blueturtle9 Featured By Owner May 19, 2011   Writer
I know right.
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:iconcrowiam:
CrowIam Featured By Owner May 19, 2011
SO are you going to be writing more stuff like this now?
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Blueturtle9 Featured By Owner May 19, 2011   Writer
I might try to
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:iconcrowiam:
CrowIam Featured By Owner May 19, 2011
sweet!
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Blueturtle9 Featured By Owner May 19, 2011   Writer
:)
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kallia-goldenwings Featured By Owner May 19, 2011
that is just beautiful
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:iconblueturtle9:
Blueturtle9 Featured By Owner May 19, 2011   Writer
Thank you :)
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fobosanddemos235 Featured By Owner May 19, 2011
I like this its....interesting :) keep up the good work!
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Blueturtle9 Featured By Owner May 19, 2011   Writer
Thank you :D
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fobosanddemos235 Featured By Owner May 19, 2011
Your Welcome!
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Sartosis Featured By Owner May 19, 2011  Student Writer
good use of repatition, creates a nice effect. :)
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:iconblueturtle9:
Blueturtle9 Featured By Owner May 19, 2011   Writer
Thank you :)
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Sartosis Featured By Owner May 19, 2011  Student Writer
:)
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silverwolverine Featured By Owner May 19, 2011  Student General Artist
I never thought I'd see the day when you'd write a non-rhyming piece ;P
only joking xD I have more imagination that that.

But yes, 'tis good. I likes it :meow:
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Blueturtle9 Featured By Owner May 19, 2011   Writer
It's fine....I never thought I'd see the day, let alone anyone else D:

Thank you I am glad you like it.
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FadingAqueous Featured By Owner May 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I like it. It is odd that you aren't rhyming lol but it is a good poem nonetheless.
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Blueturtle9 Featured By Owner May 19, 2011   Writer
Yeah I wanted to try not rhyming, I don't know whether I like it XD Thank you :D
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FadingAqueous Featured By Owner May 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
lol its always good to have variety in your writing. I'm sure the more you do it, the more you'll find you like it. ^^
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Blueturtle9 Featured By Owner May 19, 2011   Writer
We shall see soon enough I guess, it certainly allows me to write about a broader variety of topics :)
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FadingAqueous Featured By Owner May 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
lol yes it does. Hope you have fun getting the hang of it. ^^
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Blueturtle9 Featured By Owner May 19, 2011   Writer
Thanks :D
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FadingAqueous Featured By Owner May 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Youre welcome. ^^
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snowraven0 Featured By Owner May 19, 2011  Student General Artist
Weird...good, but weird not reading something by you that isnt rhymed..
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Blueturtle9 Featured By Owner May 19, 2011   Writer
Thanks and I know right it doesn't feel right.
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snowraven0 Featured By Owner May 19, 2011  Student General Artist
Indeed, very strange
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